Welcome to Lyric Critiques!!!

Well here you are in the lyric critique section, so welcome.
I don't want to waste your time, so I"ll jump right into it:

1. ABSOLUTELY none of the lyrics posted here can be foul, offensive, have crude humor, etc. etc. etc. We really don't like foul offensive and crude lyrics.
2. Please don't tear someone's lyric to shreds even if it is just outright repulsively bad.
3. Use the critiquing system. If you are just starting out writing songs, you don't want people ripping your head off because you didn't know something there's not way you could've. In that case, put a 'n' in your description (for novice). If you are a pretty intermediate kinda writer, then put an 'i' in. If you are advanced, throw in an 'a'. It's that simple.
4. If you see one person who has gotten absolutely no replies, reply. Leave the one with 20 replies for later.
5. Build on each other and become as excellent as you can be.

Jo